Tuesday, January 24, 2012

Too Good to be True

The night always started with the car ride out to the restaurant. It was about a fifteen-mile drive, but it felt three times as long on the way there, in anticipation, and three times as quick on the way home, in satisfaction. Webb sat, feeling lonely, and gazed out of the window and watched, tirelessly, the outdoors pass by like the stages of life, the ups and the downs of hills and the shifts from smooth, paved roads to bumpy gravel ones, and back again.  He sat in the window seat, not feeling the desire to engage in the conversation or the music playing. They, Webb and his large family, were working their way to the shore. It would have been relatively undetectable, but due to the unbroken pine tree forests on their left and right, and the freshness of the breeze through the open window, he could smell, taste, and almost feel the salt in the air as they made their way closer to the destination. As he sat in the back looking out to the East, he caught quick, refreshing glimpses of the bay between the tree line, and his eagerness would only double.
Always sudden, as if it had been there all alone and untouched since the last time they left, they arrived in the rocky parking lot of Miller’s Lobster Co. A small, family owned restaurant that always had enough room for the large families who enjoyed it. The rush of fresh air in Webb’s face as he hopped out of the old Suburban and smell of the sea and the day’s catch, some of it still arriving from the last few lobster boats gliding across the bay, made it impossible to think of any problems or struggles or bumpy roads from the ride in. He made his way down towards the pier, towards the beautiful sunset, and passed open tanks of lobster and clams with groups of young kids reaching in and laughing at the touch of the shellfish to their cold hands. As they rounded the corner of the main part of the restaurant all of the quick glimpses of each part of the bay that had left only a fraction of the pleasure, came together like pieces of a puzzle; the parts fit together perfectly into a scene that could never be forgotten.
Webb leaned over to his twin brother, John, who was, after all, seven minutes older, and asked softly, “John don’t you think we could come back to this same restaurant every night for the rest of our lives and never get tired of it...” He trailed off, for his remark was of no importance, it seemed, as always because John was already engaged in conversation with the beautiful girl at the table next to theirs.
John was technically seven minutes older than Webb, who were just turning sixteen and the eldest of the five boys in the family, and it always seemed that John’s extra seven minutes propelled him far ahead of Webb in every aspect of life. Except, of course, in the classroom where Webb excelled beyond John’s furthest hope.
Webb glanced around the restaurant and felt alone. He saw John talking with the beautiful girl who looked to be around the same age as the two of them. He saw his younger brothers making friends with the lobsterman who were finishing up the day, and he saw his parents waiting in line to order their usual order. He was beginning to fall back in to his lonely mood when he noticed John’s girl look over, smile, and motion for him to come join them with her hand. Webb turned his head the other way as if to check if she had recognized and old friend of hers sitting at the table behind him, and he just happened to be in the way. The other tables were empty. He looked back at her, she was laughing with John now, and he got up to join them.
On his walk over, Webb thought of all the times he wished to be social and fun, like John, but remained his pensive self. As he sat down he noticed just how beautiful she actually was, and he blushed as he sat down next to his brother. She looked over to him and asked him something, but he couldn’t hear a word she said. He felt weird on the inside but didn’t question it. It was great. As she waited for Webb, she laughed quietly and smiled a smile he would never forget.  

3 comments:

  1. I really enjoyed the short story from begginig to end. I like the beginning, because it was full of imagery and helped me get a real sense of what the setting is like on the ride to the resteraunt and the resteraunt it self. I also liked how Webb and Jihn could not be anymore different even though were twins. The ending was good too, of how even though Webb was less talkative than John, he still got that girl's attention, which is always a confidence booster for us guys. Another hting is that each sentence had new important stuff about the twins and the setting, which made the story interesting and not boring. Overall, it was a good.

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  2. In “Too Good to be True,” the author presents a teenage boy, Webb, who is experiencing the common change in his physical and mental states for his age, while being surrounded by a family tradition reminding him of his youth. Needless to say, this presents an odd situation for Webb. The family is headed for their favorite restaurant at their home away from home and the reader is taken along the journey very clearly with the author’s beautiful choice of diction and use of imagery. While Webb seems to be a normal boy, he is actually the outcast of his large family because of his unordinary social skills compared to his family’s exceptional ones, especially his twin brother John. While in the seafood shack, he feels alone: his younger brothers have made friends, his parents are ordering, and John was flirting with an outrageously gorgeous girl. This girl is the focus of both he and his twin, but he knows he has no chance. The author uses her pleasing demeanor towards Webb as a figure in the transition from an awkward shy boy, to a brave and attractive man.

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  3. In “Too Good to be True,” the author presents a teenage boy, Webb, on a trip with his diverse family to a restaurant up North. Once at the restaurant, Webb finds himself feeling very lonely and wishing to overcome it, which happens to be the main theme of the short story. The author does a great job developing this theme through something that every guy can relate to: a good-looking girl. The best part about this girl is her short-lived presence in the story. Almost simultaneously she is introduced, helps Webb overcome his loneliness, and then the story is over–leaving the reader wanting more of this beautiful girl. However, the author tends to focus much more on the small details of the setting than creating a straightforward and bold climax. While this description is very nicely written and needed, the briefness of the action completely changes the feel for the piece. Overall, “Too Good to be True” is a very great depiction of what every young boy will face in his life in order to become a young man.

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